Convention: UK English. Flagged against typing, spelling, punctuation, grammar, missing/duplicated words, and mechanical errors. Voice, style, and content not in scope.
Types: TYPO · PUNCT · SPACE · GRAM · QUOTE · HYPHEN · CASE · CONSIST · MECH · FACT
| Line | Current | Suggested | Type | Flag |
| 43 | "in August 2006.I did not yet know" | "in August 2006. I did not yet know" | SPACE | B |
| 45 | "Here. Think about this." He said. | "Here. Think about this," he said. | PUNCT | B |
| 46 | "every floor of my clinical work, , my teaching" | "every floor of my clinical work, my teaching" (double comma) | PUNCT | B |
| 61 | ends "a chain of professional events that this book will reveal" | add terminal full stop | PUNCT | B |
| 70 | "Thank you, Andy. Both of us" | single space | SPACE | B |
| 87 | "Thank you Gary, and Paul, and Julie" | "Thank you, Gary, and Paul, and Julie" (direct address comma) | PUNCT | B |
| 96 | "We wanted for Nothing." | "We wanted for nothing." (mid-sentence) | CASE | B |
| 98 | "extreme ends of the technology spectrum.." | single full stop | PUNCT | B |
| 98 | "Dan you are so special" | "Dan, you are so special" (direct address) | PUNCT | B |
| 107 | "aged just 27 It must have brought" | "aged just 27. It must have brought" | PUNCT | R |
| 112 | "Love you dad, miss you" | "Love you, Dad, miss you" (direct address; Dad capitalised as title) | PUNCT/CASE | A |
| Line | Current | Suggested | Type | Flag |
| 489 | "humankind has generated. So you" | single space | SPACE | B |
| 490 | "construct your answer, there isn't" | comma splice — replace comma with full stop or semicolon | GRAM | A |
| 491 | "(known as compute) – this is not" | en-dash with spaces; em-dash used elsewhere | CONSIST | B |
| 491 | magical "I know everything in the world AI database" it comes from | missing comma or dash after closing quote | PUNCT | A |
| 494 | "in its simplest form – here's a fuller explanation" | add terminal punctuation | PUNCT | B |
| 554 | "FinOps teams… doubled in twelve months from thirty-one per cent to sixty-three per cent of large organisations now operating one." | grammar mismatch — subject ("teams") doesn't agree with predicate ("of large organisations operating one"). Recast suggested. | GRAM | A |
| Line | Current | Suggested | Type | Flag |
| 877 | "for a fraction of a second causing someone to feel ashamed" | "for a fraction of a second, causing someone to feel ashamed" | PUNCT | B |
| 942 | "fluency dressed as discipline. Affectation, by another name." | single space | SPACE | B |
| 950 | "internalizing and externalizing" | UK: "internalising and externalising" — check whole para for -ize vs -ise | CONSIST | A |
| 990 | "Maria has the shame with only one defence — \"the AI did it\"." | UK convention places full stop inside the closing quote: "…the AI did it." | PUNCT | B |
| Line | Current | Suggested | Type | Flag |
| 1213 | "characterisation: Future self." | single space | SPACE | B |
| 1213 | "The baby. Each client names" | single space | SPACE | B |
| 1213 | "let the room do the rest. The client" | single space | SPACE | B |
| 1213 | their Russian journey begins "well this one is me" "so who's that then" "earlier me" and so the journey continues | missing punctuation between quoted utterances; capitalisation inside quotes (e.g. "Well this one is me.") | QUOTE/PUNCT/CASE | A |
| 1221 | "Paul asked if the hurt doll had a name." | third-person voice shift mid-passage (Olivia's account) — confirm intended | CONSIST | A |
| 1242 | ends "in the preparation of this and other books that you read" | add terminal full stop | PUNCT | B |
| Line | Current | Suggested | Type | Flag |
| 1320 | "in my mouth. I'd had a sore tongue" | single space | SPACE | B |
| 1320 | ends "what I call the pirate surgery" | add terminal full stop | PUNCT | B |
| 1321 | "August 10th, 2017. Mr [name held]" | single space | SPACE | B |
| 1321 | "Mr [name held] who announced \"it is cancer. The treatment is cutting your tongue out\"" | "Mr [name held], who announced" OR "Mr [name held] announced" (fragment as written); terminal full stop missing | GRAM/PUNCT | A |
| 1322 | "\"you should be prepared to be unintelligible on the phone\"." | full stop inside closing quote (UK); capitalise first word of quote ("You") | PUNCT/CASE | B |
| 1323 | "I said: \"don't worry about that, I don't use the phone\"." | capitalise "Don't"; full stop inside closing quote | PUNCT/CASE | B |
| 1327 | "OK Paul, time to see if you can talk "A . . . , B . . . , C, . . . D . . . " eventually came out | nested-quote structure broken; "C, . . ." carries stray comma; outer quote close ambiguous; double space after "tears." | QUOTE/PUNCT/SPACE | A |
| 1331 | "I had to lead to speak again." | "learn" | TYPO | R |
| 1331 | "feeding through a tube. I had to" | single space | SPACE | B |
| 1377 | "by my editorial agent I call Jose" | "by my editorial agent, whom I call Jose" — missing relative pronoun/comma | GRAM | A |
| 1384 | "Thank you Jose. Some helpful insights" | "Thank you, Jose." (direct address); single space | PUNCT/SPACE | B |
| Line | Current | Suggested | Type | Flag |
| 1487 | "an artificial Intelligence" | lowercase "intelligence" — most uses in book are lowercase | CASE/CONSIST | A |
| 1491 | "Your probably now thinking" | "You're" | TYPO | R |
| 1491 | "please stick with it – its about" | "it's" | TYPO | R |
| 1496 | "Filed under WWWF — what happened, where, who was present, how it felt" | acronym is W·W·W·F but expanded form gives What/Where/Who/How — third letter mismatch with "how" → check intended | CONSIST | A |
| 1497 | "wouldn't have vanished. Something deeply hidden." | single space | SPACE | B |
| 1497 | "If maybe I had done something different my dad wouldn't have vanished." | "If maybe I had done something different, my dad wouldn't have vanished." | PUNCT | B |
| 1506 | "I said: \"we don't talk about that\". A reinforcement learned behaviour" | single space x2; capitalise "We"; full stop inside quote; "reinforcement-learned"; terminal full stop | SPACE/CASE/PUNCT/HYPHEN | A |
| 1509 | "Not good enough" | full stop inside quote (UK) | PUNCT | B |
| 1516 | "Not Good Enough. NGE." | single space | SPACE | B |
| 1520 | "Biblical is how I would describe that day , it was." | remove space before comma | SPACE | B |
| 1521 | "'Noticing I have 2 Dads.'" | straight quotes used here; curly elsewhere — check house style | CONSIST | B |
| 1524 | " We don't talk about that." | remove leading space | SPACE | B |
| Line | Current | Suggested | Type | Flag |
| 1558 | "a federation of self's" | "selves" | TYPO/GRAM | R |
| 1561 | "more than one self-pressing" | "more than one self pressing" (no hyphen — not a compound adjective) | HYPHEN | A |
| 1565 | "There is no gap between them through which the truth could press Jose (Claude AI Anthropic Opus 4.7) | opening quote never closed; attribution syntax — also missing terminal full stop or close-quote | QUOTE/PUNCT | R |
| 1567 | "Writing a book. driving a car" | either "…book, driving a car" (comma list) or "…book. Driving a car." (capital after stop) | PUNCT/CASE | R |
| 1567 | "trusting, healing, listening, ." | remove trailing comma before full stop | PUNCT | A |
| 1569 | "All behaviour is learned behaviour. Not all behaviour is taught". Paul Roebuck – coined term – tagline – deeply held belief | full stop should sit inside the closing quote (UK, complete sentence); terminal full stop missing on "deeply held belief" | PUNCT | A |
| 1572 | "every belief is a memory… that also suggest there is no universal truth" | "suggests" (subject-verb) | GRAM | R |
| 1575 | "lion eating a human! Most come from" | single space | SPACE | B |
| 1580 | "The AI is a silicone chip" | "silicon chip" — silicon (Si) is the semiconductor; silicone is the rubber polymer | TYPO/FACT | R |
| 1587 | "the survival system gets a pin prick" | "pinprick" (one word — and line 1590 uses the same word — check consistency) | HYPHEN | B |
| 1620 | "Not what about the kids Not Will the grandkids ever hear grandads voice." | three issues: (a) missing punctuation between "kids" and "Not"; (b) "grandads" → "Grandad's"; (c) terminal "?" or "." missing | PUNCT/CASE | R |